the haiku diaries


June 26, 2014 by Rachel Dickinson
June 26, 2014, 6:59 am
Filed under: haiku, rachel's post | Tags: , , ,

Drizzly walk today.
My foot went squish squish inside
my boot. More duct tape.

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I like this poem because of the humor of the surprise. Up until the word “inside” I had an image of someone walking in mud. At that point I wasn’t sure of the direction of the poem, until I reached the last sentence, which had a surprise of humor.

Comment by M. Sakran

Thank you very much for the comment. I thought it worked as well.

Comment by Rachel Dickinson




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